Copyright Ellie Garratt
Thanks to Summer Ross for tagging me in the "Look at that!" challenge. Here is what you have to do: Count up the 'LOOK's in your current WIP and choose your favourite three. Then post the paragraphs around the word. Then tag five writers and pass along the challenge.
I figured there would not be that many looks. I was wrong. I was shocked to find I had 95 looks (or variants of look) in the first 17,000 words of my work-in-progress, which equates to roughly 0.5% of my total word count. I feel some serious re-writing about to take place.
Choosing my three favourites was hard; I like them all. In the end I chose these:
The portal is the only entrance and exit to Hometown, and no one may enter without the Warden present. We’ve all been to the entrance during learning time; we are taken there every year by our teacher and warned of the consequences of breaking the rules. They show us pictures of how Outside used to look, with its green meadows, clear rivers, and well-ordered towns. Then we look at Outside after The Disaster. The darkened skies, yellow seas, ruined buildings, and dead bodies. I always look away. My father showed them to me when I was young and I vowed to never look at them again. Yet in all those pictures I never saw a brilliant yellow ball in the sky that gives warmth. Was it there before The Disaster or is it something new the Guardians have given us? Something deep within me is compelling me to find the answers to these questions, though I have no idea why.
I look at the floor and count how many paces from where I stand it would take me to get to the other side of the boundary; to go through the door separating one life from another. I guess twenty.
I look at Preston and Jeremiah, both silent and expressionless, staring at the scene before them, and I ask myself whether either of them really care. Do they have the same thoughts and feelings as I? Do they have a suffocating ache deep within their bodies that never seems to go away? Can they even feel hurt and sorrow?
So, that was my three favourites. I'm tagging five writers for this challenge.
Emily R. King